Obama Campaign paper for University: How is this intro paragraph?
Posted Sunday, March 28, 2010 by admin
good references? trying to hard to be funny or actually made you chuckle? Do you want to read on? Should this be 2 different paragraphs? Your input is greatly appreciated.
Don’t let my questions fool you; I promise you will be entertained:
September the 28th, 2008: Obama ‘08 is released, made available to anyone with an iPhone™ or iPod® touch1 ; this application can also be found on Facebook. Tell me, what do all these things have in common? I’ll give you a hint, it has to do with age. Well, they can all be found in the pockets of college students across the country. That’s right, in case you haven’t heard, Facebook now fits in your pocket and it’s time to Rock the Vote. Now as the ninja-turtle, single-Mtv generation who grew alongside the internet, we turn to our gadgets for advice. And who is there with open arms promoting a optimistic message of adaptation and variation? Ladies and gentlemen, please silence your cellphones and mute your Myspace and let me introduce to you a good friend of Joe Anyman–or staunch critic, depending on how you look at it–the man who may lead us out of this monetary downturn, whose use of technology would surprise even Bob Dole. Some have called his plans “class warfare” and claimed he refuses to “repudiate those remarks”7. Remember, no matter who wins, this election has already shattered a few glass ceilings. But Barack Obama has by far the freshest, most current version of a Presidential Campaign, and his enthusiasm may prove to be more contagious than any viral marketing; by capturing the youth vote and spreading his roots far and wide across the Great Plains, Obama stands to not just make, but also shape, history.
Who cares about this stuff, as someone pointed it out “It’s about the economy stupid”
bad bad place to do this. I think its a great paragraph introduction. But people are ignorant and they think this election is the superbowl.
good luck on positive answers from the opposite party.
but most importantly, good luck on your paper.
Great start, I would read on, and that is coming from a 40 year old white male Republican who is voting for Obama.
Make sure you put this in and your set for reality
cult
. Great devotion to a person, idea, object, movement
devoted attachment to, or extravagant admiration for, a person, principle or lifestyle,
something popular or fashionable among a particular section of society
a group with extreme or dangerous philosophical or political ideas
maybe the first para is a bit long. Maybe you could tighten it up and then cite a lot of the detail there in the second and third and even, fourth paragraph.
Sounds like a good approach, but the last sentence sounds like the conclusion, not the preface.